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In the short story, "The Pedestrian" by Ray Bradbury and the novel Taken by Erin Bowman, people's desire for advanced technology gets in the way of human relationships because of the demand for power.

In the dystopian story, “The Pedestrian” the main protagonist is Leonard Mead. Mr. Mead enjoys walking the city streets alone every night. Ever since technology in this society has been advancing, human connections have started to disappear. “I tell him the truth about the Laicos Project and the Heist, about Frank and Harvey. It’s exhausting and it makes me realize how completely lost I feel, even now I have the answers. Without Blaine, I am only half of myself.” (272) Gray realizes how lost he is without the human connection with his twin brother, Blaine, and how he feels like he's missing a part of him even now he has the answers. Gray believes that Blaine is the other half of him, almost like they need each other to live. Ever since Blaine has been heisted, Gray feels like, after that moment, nothing will be the same again and wishes to go back and have his brother with him one last time before they have to say goodbye.

An additional example of the need for human connections is in the dystopian book, “Taken” the main protagonist is Gray Weathersby. Gray understands that being “Heisted” means losing someone you love and realizing that you may never reunite with them ever again. Gray misses those days with his brother Blaine and hopes to see him again so they can finally have the connection they deserve. “It was not unequal to walking through a graveyard where only the faintest glimmers of firefly light appeared in flickers behind the windows.” (2) It is not unequal for Leonard Mead to walk through a graveyard. The graveyard resembles a neighborhood in “The Pedestrian '' and the citizens are like the tombs who have no connection to one another. Most people in this society are so caught up in the advanced technology of television, they don’t keep in mind that if technology advances any further, it could lose its humanity. The light resembles the television screens glimmering through the windows of houses, which connects to how people never go outside for fresh air and how they stop connecting with the ones they love most.

Ray Bradbury and Erin Bowman prove that humans need a connection to others and nature to build a strong state of mental well-being and happiness. Otherwise, mankind will fall apart.